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My favorite section of “The Dragon’s Eye”

     “And who are you?” the funny looking man asked. “Perhaps I could write a song about it: the young boy who wandered alone the open roads of the southern realm. Ah! But that would make a magnificent tale!”
     As he spoke, his hands moved quickly, bringing out four brightly colored round objects. Throwing them up in the air, he tossed them back and forth in intricate patterns that took Yole’s breath away. Yole laughed delightedly and clapped his hands.
     The young man smiled and stood up to take a bow, “You like my juggling?”
     Yole nodded enthusiastically, “Yes, I do!”
     The strange man smiled again at the delight of his young audience, but then his shoulders drooped and his smile faltered, “It is truly a pity that no one else seems to,” he sighed dramatically.
    Yole looked at him quizzically, “What do you mean?”
    “I am completely unappreciated by many of my audiences,” the man sighed again and put a hand to his forehead, his voice was plaintive but uncomplaining. “I tried to get an audience at the castle, but they have too many minstrels already, or so they told me. Then I tried to juggle and sing for the rich merchants, but they are all more interested in the newer stories and the fancier tricks, bah! Fancier tricks! Why, when I juggle I make their heads spin, but that’s the way of the rich, they’re alright until you want to be paid, then they get stingy on you and hem and haw about how little talent you really have. Hah! They wouldn’t know talent if it reached out and pinched their noses, now there would be a sight! Ha ha!” The man’s voice changed with each turn of his story, as if he were weaving the words into an intricate pattern on some unseen loom.
    Yole laughed at the antics of the minstrel. The minstrel did not notice, but continued talking, almost as though to himself.
    “No siree, there is no greater talent beneath the Dragon’s Eye than that of the Great Kiernan Kane! No, the Magnificent… oh, hello there,” the Great Kiernan Kane abruptly halted his flow of words as he suddenly seemed to remember that he had an audience, small though it was. “What is your name? I completely forgot to ask you.”
    Yole suppressed a smile, “My name is Y…Ian.” He said, catching himself just an instant before he slipped and gave away his real name.
    “Yian! Marvelous!” The minstrel said, “And my name is Kiernan Kane. Kiernan Kane the Magnificent Minstrel they call me in the large cities, (they also throw rotten fruits and vegetables at me, just goes to show how unappreciated I am) but you can call me Kiernan.”

~ jenelle

Shameless Self Promotion

Sorry, no cutesy-alliteration title today….

I have a request for anyone who can spare a few minutes. I have posted an excerpt of my book over at CreateSpace, and I was wondering if anyone would be willing to take a few minutes, read the excerpt and then give me some feedback.

If you have the ability to download PDFs you can click on this link

Or, if you don’t, you can go here instead

OR… if you are one who has actually READ the entire book… might you be willing to leave a review at Amazon (that link will take you to The Dragon’s Eye product page)?

Thanks in advance!

~ jenelle


I apologize in advance for the length of this post, but I need to explain this in its entirety – which means that it’s gonna be a long one (or several posts, whichever works better).

Ok. First of all… a few basics:
If you believe Genesis 1:1 – 2:2 to be a literal creation by God (whether or not you believe in literal days or “ages”) then you have to acknowledge that dinosaurs were created on the same day/age as humans: Day 6. (some may have been created on the 5th day, if they flew or swam). Thus, you have to acknowledge that dinosaurs and humans walked the earth at the Same Time. (this is very important)
Even if you believe in the “age” theory, you still have to acknowledge that dinosaurs and man walked the earth at the same time because you have to acknowledge that sin and death did not enter the world or the Garden until After Day 7. If nothing died before day 7, then you have to acknowledge that every creature God created on Days 5-6 existed together at least for days 5-7.

Alright… moving right along. If you concede that dinosaurs and man existed at the same time, then you start to realize that the world’s propaganda about “cave-men,” “neanderthals,” “cromagnon men,” etc, is all a lie. There never were any cave men. (This is not to say that nobody has ever lived in a cave, that happens all the time… but the people in history/present day who lived in caves were/are simply humans, just like you and me, not the grunting, violent, sub-intellectuals that are portrayed in movies/TV shows, etc.

It’s not a huge stretch, then, once you’ve discovered that humans and dinosaurs lived on the same planet at the same time… to realize that there must have been SOME dinosaurs on Noah’s ark. (Not full grown ones, that would be silly). But God told Noah, “You are to bring inot the ark two of all living creatures, male and female, to keep them alive with you. Two of every kind of bird, of every kind of animal, and of every kind of creature that moves along the ground will come to you to be kept alive.” (Gen. 6:19-20) – He didn’t exclude fierce animals. We accept that he had elephants and rhinoceroses and alligators and giraffes on the ark, animals that, when full grown, aren’t exactly small. This ark… to give you some perspective… was HUGE. (about the size of the Titanic – but with less “stuff” inside, so it could hold more). Here is a good link with a picture.

Ok… so if we believe that dinosaurs lasted at least a little bit beyond the flood… then we get to Job. Most Bible scholars believe Job is the Oldest book of the Bible, predating Moses. Many Bible scholars believe that Job was a contemporary of Abraham, only about 400 years after the flood… in that time, it is possible that the dinosaurs (even the big ones) were still around. Maybe not many, at this point… but if you allow for them to be around, and well-known enough to be recognizable, then it is not hard to believe that the behemoth of Job 40:15-24 is, indeed, a dinosaur. Imagery such as: “tail swings like a cedar,” “his bones are tubes of bronze,” “his limbs are rods of iron.” “He ranks first among the works of God,” “he is secure, though the Jordan should surge against his mouth.” “Can anyone caputre him by the eyes, or trap him and pierce his nose?” Bring to mind images of something FAR larger and more impressive than an elephant or a hippopotomous (both of which have been trapped, elephants are commonly used for riding, and neither of which have very impressive tails)

But then, read on into Job 41… this is where it gets interesting. For here, God describes a creature called a “leviathan.” (Remember, this is the Lord speaking… and He doesn’t exaggerate)

41:7: can you fill his hide with harpoons or his head with fishing spears?
41:8: if you lay a hand on him, you will remember the struggle and never do it again!
41:9: Any hope of subduing him is false; the mere sight of him is overpowering.
41:10: No one is fierce enough to rouse him.
41:15: His back has rows of shields tightly sealed together
41:18: His snorting throws out flashes of light; his eyes are like the rays of the dawn.
41:19: Firebrands stream from his mouth; sparks of fire shoot out.
41:20: Smoke pours from his nostrils as from a boiling pot over a fire of reeds.
41:21: His breath sets coals ablaze, and flames dart from his mouth.
41:24: His chest is hard as rock.
41:26: The swords that reaches him has no effect, nor does the spear or the dart or the javelin.
41:27: Iron he treats like straw and bronze like rotten wood.
41:33-34: Nothing on earth is his equal – a creature without fear. He looks down on all that are haughty; he is king over all that are proud.

Does this sound like a crocodile to you? The Lord spends Four Whole Verses talking about the fact that this creature breathes fire! The rest of the chapter makes it clear that this is not an animal you can capture, tame, or subdue. “When he rises up, the mighty are terrifed.” (41:25) This is not a creature that Crocodile Dundee would Dare wrestle with. I would encourage you to take a moment to read through the whole chapter of Job 41, it’s a fun read… and it pretty much talks about a dragon.

Besides all this, the word “dragon” actually appears in Scripture 19 times in 18 different verses, and the Leviathan himself shows up in 3 other passages of Scripture besides Job 41. In the NIV they have translated the words: tannah – dragon, and tanniyn – dragon, serpent, sea monster, whale – to read as “serpent” in most cases, and “sea monster” or “monster” in the rest and “desert jackals” in one. In the KJV (which, I know has some issues) they translated both of these words as “dragon” 18 times out of the 28 that it is used.

In the new Testament, we find the Greek word “drakon” 13 times in Revelation – translated as “dragon” every time.

So there you have it… my reasoning behind the belief that dragons existed, and that we get a lot of the imagery surrounding them from the Bible itself, including their size, ferocity, the fact that they breathed fire, and even that their chests were pretty stinkin’ invulnerable.

~ jenelle

On Growing Up as a Writer – accepting criticism

I have recently realized (as in the last year) that if you can’t take criticism, you aren’t ready to send out queries. You aren’t ready to publish. Because if you can’t take criticism, then you aren’t ready to improve.

I wasn’t ready when I self-published my first book. I wasn’t ready when I self-published my second book. I wasn’t ready when I wrote book three. I was getting closer by the time I was writing book four. I turned a corner when I entered the 2010 ABNA contest.

I don’t know what it was. Meeting other authors. Receiving helpful advice and critiques from people who know the world of writing better than I. Or maybe I just finally grew up. But somewhere during that contest, I finally learned how to accept criticism. I learned how to take suggestions for what they were: suggestions. When you enter the realm of writing (and probably any creative realm) you put a lot of yourself into your work. By giving your words to others to read you put yourself out there for judging. And sometimes the judges aren’t kind.

But sometimes they are right.

And you need to be able to see clearly. You need to be able to see when they are right, when something does need to be changed, edited, tweaked, thrown out, or rewritten. You need to distance yourself during the editing process, because otherwise it will hurt too much. Throwing out whole paragraphs is painful if you can’t distance yourself, because those words are your babies, they sprang from your mind and they live on the page and you can’t delete them…. because that’s like killing part of your creativity… but sometimes those first words… sometimes they just aren’t any good. They need pruning. Some need to be tossed. Some, some few, might be perfect. Most will need revising.

If you can accept a critique from someone who isn’t close to the material, it makes your job of editing easier. If you can blink back the momentary tears, the fleeting defensiveness, the half-second of disbelief, you will find that you can take the good advice and apply it to your words and they will be so much better than you even thought they could.

Sometimes you can look at that critique and your response will be, “Nope… I like that bit just the way it is.” And that is fine. You don’t have to change everything based on one reviewer/editor/proof-reader.

I write this because I ask for critiques often. I ask for criticism on my fan page, and here on my blog, especially come contest time. And I don’t want anyone to hesitate to tell me something needs to be edited because you think you’re going to hurt my feelings. I may take your advice, I may not… but you aren’t going to hurt my feelings (as long as you aren’t attacking me personally, obviously). I welcome your critique. I welcome your critique. Because I want my writing to improve. I want my skills to improve. I want my talent to grow. So, thank you, to those of you who have helped me out with editing and critiquing the past few days. I really appreciate it.

~ jenelle