300 Word Pitch

Just in case you were curious, here is the 300 word pitch that I submitted to the ABNA that kept me in the running:
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Many hundreds of years ago the land of Aom-igh was in grave danger from the Dark Country across the Stained Sea; in their danger King Llian sought out the help of the dragons and the myth-folk. Graldon, King of the Dragons, granted the human king with a gift that would help him defeat his enemies. Graldon also promised King Llian that the dragons would come to the humans’ aid should Aom-igh ever be in such deadly danger again.
Years passed, and Aom-igh remained safe and isolated from its enemies. The dragons slowly disappeared and faded into legend and myth. Magic seemed to flee from the land and people began to forget that it had ever existed.
When her kingdom is threatened by an unknown enemy, the headstrong Princess Kamarie must set off on a quest to find the one man who may be able to save them all: the former King’s Warrior. With her travel two companions: a maid named Darby who has been her nurse since Kamarie was very young, and a squire named Oraeyn who would rather be on the front lines when the enemy arrives and resents his charge to travel with and protect the princess. However, finding this legendary hero proves to be the least of their worries. Together the companions encounter more than they ever bargained for: a beautiful gatekeeper, a sword fashioned by dragons, dark warriors who pursue them relentlessly and hound them at every turn, and an underground world full of mythical creatures are just the beginning of their adventures. As they search for the answers to mystifying prophecies and seek a way to save everything that they hold dear the comrades will learn a little about courage, a lot about truth, and more about themselves than they ever imagined.
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What do you think? I was surprised I made it, but then again, “Jesus looked at them and said, “With man this is impossible, but with God all things are possible.” Matthew 19:26.

Accepting critiques of my pitch now. Do you think I should revise it for my query letter? How would you describe my book in 300 words or less? This is the part of writing that is hardest for me: narrowing it down into a concise explanation of what the book is about, so I’m honestly looking for tips, ideas, or even criticisms here.

~ jenelle

Fan Page

Hello friends and fans,

Sorry I have been absent from this blog for so long. I am finally back. Today’s post won’t be long, I just wanted to draw your attention to a few things (anyone who actually peruses this blog anymore).

First: I have created a facebook fan-page for my writing. I update it every couple of days or at least once a week. If you’d like to swing by, you can click on the following link: http://www.facebook.com/home.php#!/pages/Raleigh-NC/Jenelle-Leanne-Schmidt/282216172260?ref=nf

Second: I entered my first book, The Dragon’s Eye, into the Amazon Breakthrough Novel Award contest and made it past the first round of cuts! I am super psyched. You can read about the contest here: http://www.amazon.com/b?node=332264011

Third: I created a place where you can read a preview of my book and leave feedback here: https://www.createspace.com/pub/community/give.review.do?id=1066414&rewrite=true

Thanks for swinging by. I will be updating much more frequently now.

~ jenelle

Technical Aspects

When one is writing a book, or especially a series of books, technical details must be attended to. In the Tellurae Aquaous series I have created such details as a currency system (based on the “stater” which is the equivalent to a penny, or a pence), and even new constellations. I thought my readers might be interested to hear the “legends” behind some of the constellations:

Yorien: the wandering warrior, unjustly cast out from his home and forced to wander the desolate plains of the night sky alone, with only his sword and a broken shield. He is said to be the protector of the innocent.

Chareele: the fair princess who fell in love with Yorien. But alas, he did not love her in return, for her love was kept secret even from him. Eventually her love was discovered by her enemies, for her heart shone in her eyes. She was banished from the kingdom and made to walk the nighttime sky as well, but upon the opposite horizon from her love and forever facing in the opposite direction. However, the brightest star in the sky is that of Chareele’s heart, and the purity of her love shames the blind eye of Yorien.

The Gryphon: with outspread wings, the gryphon is a symbol of courage and daring, he follows Yorien on every quest, but far enough behind so that Yorien never knows or sees who it is that gives him aid.

Wyvyrn: the long, powerful king of all dragons flies through the night at the top of the sky. He is the symbol of nobility and magic, both of which are now at best difficult to find in the world.

Artairus: The constellation named in honor of the great king Artair. When that King among kings passed into the shadow realm, his people named a group of stars after the great man who had led his people in peace. His is a constellation of seven stars, six forming a half circle, and one lone star centered beneath them, symbolizing the Great King as ruler over the six main powers of Tellurae Aquaous. (Llycaelon, Aom-igh, Effoin-Ebedd, Endalia, Kallayohm, and Yochathain)

Ethalon: The eagle, the symbol of pride and nobility, flies across the southern part of the sky

Alianna: A unicorn, the symbol of beauty and love, appears in the sky above Chareele’s head, protecting her.

~ jenelle